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I'm falling asleep
To car rides and lullabies
But you're still missing

I am lulled to sleep
By potholes and flashing lights
Oh where've you gone?

Inspired by the smell of a new car, rainy windshields, and the old John Mayer.
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Kiyoui's avatar
This haiku is simply adorable. I feel like this concept could actually be unraveled into a longer delicate poem.

The soft nostalgic feeling the reader gets from the middle line is perfect and uplifting which then takes it's dramatic shift into the final line when no one is there. It's like a crash, or more appropriately a wake-up. The poem seems to capture 'dreaming to reality' quite simply.

I love the haiku, but I still think you should toy around with the idea of a longer version. <3